Blog 13~ The Last Blog Post :'(

            In class when we first began to discuss the project I was beyond nervous. I was unsure how I would be able to write such a massive thing and see it come together well. Also with all of my other classes it seemed unreasonable. However after it was stated that we would be doing it in class, and that it’s more about quantity then quality the assignment seemed to look a bit smaller. If I was aiming for perfection while I wrote the whole script it never would have been finished.

            I really enjoyed doing this project. I got a lot of experience with writing a script and it was fun doing an episode of a tv show that I watch. We both had to sit down and watch episodes to really grasp how our characters talk. There really is a lot that goes into the creation of a script.

            I liked when we wrote out a paragraph for each part of our stories on the blog. It really helped when writing the story so I always had a guideline of where I was going next. The percentage pages really helped with the plot of our story. Also they showed us how a script should look in the first place. I had no prior knowledge to how a story truly should come together before this. The least helpful thing in the workbook was that we didn’t go through everything in it. Looking through it I noticed that it would’ve potentially helped to steer us in the right direction.

            I learned that I am too much a perfectionist at times, and cranking things out isn’t easy for me. But I think together we were able to conquer that and whip out a lot of pages. Together we noticed how hard it is to write a script. Our final script was 68 pages. We handled the time not always well in class. However we spent a lot of time at home working on the script. It was hard to sit down and write more than five pages because it made your brain hurt after a while. We should’ve spent the time in class better, but we spent many hours at home which compensated. We would’ve had more pages, but the Celtx deleted many of them.

            The strength of our script is that it feels real, and brought laughs to our own faces. The humor was consistent with Adventure Time, and they could’ve been real episodes. Everything came together well, but the punctuation and some of the intense descriptions need more work on them. I think Tyler and I are going to be working on this this summer and sending it in for potential approval to be episodes.

            My favorite parts of the scripts are how everything came together. I like how characters were incorporated from different episodes and it all seemed to flow very well. Also our new character fits with the Adventure Time aura. I would have worked more on Adventure Time and sent them in. However I wished we did the writing exercises more. All the words we put together were never really used. And I spent a long time on the six word memoir and the final project was never seen. I did enjoy writing the script, but I wish we did other things as well, like we did in the beginning of the semester. If given more time to do the Adventure Time script we would’ve worked at the same pace, and then went back to work on it. But I think we did a good mix of everything. It was a great semester thanks Mrs. Basko!

Blog 12~ Scene in a Scene

            The Adventure Time scene we chose was both of our favorites from the second episode we made. I believe that the greatest strength of the scene was the comic relief we incorporated into it. There were many different interacting characters bouncing off of one another and making it extremely funny to those who are familiar with Adventure Time. Throughout all of our script we tried to put in characters from different episodes, but this scene particularly really did that well. When I read it over it still makes me laugh, and I can really see in my head this being an episode and flowing well.

            I am very proud of this scene because we put together a lot of interesting ideas and scrambled them to get this. With the amount of time we had we created a lot of quality work. However there are some issues with the scene. The formatting as well as punctuation really needs improvement I noticed as I was rereading the scene for our classmates. One of our classmates gave us the feedback that we needed a more descriptive background on the characters. I do believe that Adventure Time can be hard to follow unless you’ve seen all of the episodes, but I think the randomness in the scene followed how the show usually goes pretty well.

            If we were to rewrite the scene I think we should add more description to each of the acts. Not necessarily having a narrator talk about the characters, but have the picture that’s in our head on the paper. As a writer we see what we’re trying to convey in the script, but it is important to make it so that the reader can see the scene how we see it exactly. Where the Cosmic Owl talked to Finn about math, there should be a flashback to his first and only appearance in the show. This might help the reader to piece together the scene better. Also there are certain screen shots that I could see adding to the scene as a whole. 

Blog 11~

Jake: Looking down and KICKING the dirt, with his hands behind his back.
"Lady I love you and I'm sorry I missed our viola practice, I was just out adventuring with Finn and V.U.P, I..."
LADY RAINICORN interrupts 
Lady Rainicorn: Speaking rapidly in KOREAN and POINTING an accusing nub/hoof at JAKE.
 "제이크, 그 뱀파이어 유니콘 페가수스 소녀와 항상 아웃, 그녀는 우리 사랑하는 사이에 온다." (Jake, you're always out with that Vampire Unicorn Pegasus girl, she's coming between us darling.)
Jake: With an astonished look on his face.
 "What?!?! No way, V.U.P and I are strictly friends!"
Lady Rainicorn: Narrows her eyes and raises her voice even more.
"아, 그래? 저희 비올라 세션에 나타나지 않았을 때, 당신과 그녀의 다른 하루를 보았다. 실행 및 꽃 마시 멜로를 통해 점프!" (Oh yeah? I saw you and HER the other day, when you didn't show up for our viola session. Running and jumping through the flowering marshmallows!)
Jake:
 "Sweetheart, we were running from a horde of angry goblins!"
Lady Rainicorn: Tears begin forming around her eyes now 
"난 신경 안 써, 그것은 기본적으로 같은이야!" (I don't care, it's basically the same thing!)

*She then flies away crying, leaving Jake confused and somewhat upset.*

Blog 10~

(The scene that moves the story forward is when Finn observes VUP leaving the Nightosphere and returning to the land of Ooo. Finn sees this event and realizes that VUP is evil, and becomes conflicted and runs to Marceline for help since she knows all about the goings on in the Nightosphere.)

Finn runs to Marceline's house and enters abruptly with sweat running down his worried face.

Finn: Marceline, my life is conflicting on itself! Jake and VUP and the Nightosphere and Lady Rainicorn and!
(he's rambling and Marceline cuts him off)
Marceline: FINN! Calm down, and say it again slower this time.
Finn: (rambling quickly) OK sooooo we met this Vampire Unicorn Pegasus from the Nightosphere but I had no idea she was from the Nightosphere see she only speaks Spanish but Jake and I and her all went adventuring together. And I see now that she was kinda potentially maybe trying to manipulate us. We destroyed evil and she kinda seemed to like the powernessy stuff a little too much. Jake wouldn't believe me if I tried to tell him she was evil cause he knows I think him and Lady Rainicorn should make up!
Marceline: Calm down Finn it's okay I promise, how about you and I make a pro con list? We can figure this all out I promise Finn.

Blog 9~

Jake: 
"Lady I love you and I'm sorry I missed our viola practice, I was just out adventuring with Finn and V.U.P, I..."
Lady Rainicorn:
 "제이크, 그 뱀파이어 유니콘 페가수스 소녀와 항상 아웃, 그녀는 우리 사랑하는 사이에 온다." (Jake, you're always out with that Vampire Unicorn Pegasus girl, she's coming between us darling.)
Jake: "What?!?! No way, V.U.P and I are strictly friends!"
Lady Rainicorn: 
"아, 그래? 저희 비올라 세션에 나타나지 않았을 때, 당신과 그녀의 다른 하루를 보았다. 실행 및 꽃 마시 멜로를 통해 점프!" (Oh yeah? I saw you and HER the other day, when you didn't show up for our viola session. Running and jumping through the flowering marshmallows!)
Jake:
 "Sweetheart, we were running from a horde of angry goblins!"
Lady Rainicorn:
"난 신경 안 써, 그것은 기본적으로 같은이야!" (I don't care, it's basically the same thing!)


*She then flies away crying, leaving Jake confused a somewhat upset.*

Blog Post #8 ~Three Things to Take Away from a Passage Read in Class

1) More dramatic and action should be used in dialog. Good dialog moves things along to leave you breathless. Read your dialog aloud to hear how it sounds.
2) Play with other peoples dialog. Listen and observe to behavior and personality in dialog. Identify the characters self-dialogs by their mannerisms.
3) Put two people together that would want to avoid each other. This will start a super charged atmosphere, with fear of explosion in dialog. Make a difference between what is said and not said; allow the watcher/reader to be able to take away things that aren't actually said.

Blog 7

Opening Scene

The episode begins with Finn and Jake walking through the woods in the land of Ooo. Finn asks Jake about the meaning of their lives and the scene snaps to a flashback of the first television episode of Adventure Time where Finn has his bucket list written on his arm, something about slaying goblins and fighting evil. It snaps back to the present where Finn looks like he's just had an out-of-body-experience and Jake makes an intelligent comment, and turns it into a stupid comment as he always does. They see a strange, mysterious being that turns out to be a Vampire-Unicorn-Pegasus. Suddenly there is a zoom in on her heel and she trips over a small pebble in the grass. She trips and falls rolling into the trees. Finn yells "Shmowzow! Jake we gotta help!" Jake: "Eh, I'm fat." Then Finn grabs Jake's arm and they’re off into the forest to get her. The scene will then cut to a view behind them, peaking out of the bushes to see a black Vampire-Unicorn-Pegasus with cuts and scrapes all over it. Jake and Finn look at each other and Jake says in a mind-blown way "Finn that's a V.U.P, there was said to only be one in the world." Upon hearing voices the V.U.P cries out for help in Spanish “AYUDAME!”

The Big Decision

In the story line the “Big Decision” will be the one made by Jake when it turns four-o’clock (his head rings like an alarm clock changing shape). This interrupts the montage and makes Jake pause to go to the jam session he always has with Lady Rainicorn. However he decides to continue adventuring with Finn and his new buddy VUP not realizing the consequences that may occur in the future for these actions. Meanwhile Lady Rainicorn waits upon the roof in which they always jam on. She realizes after a time lapse that Jake will not be attending and she goes to see Bubblegum Princess.

The “All is Lost Moment”

Finn knows that VUP is from the Nightosphere, but he doesn’t know what to do about it. He realizes that she is pure evil and toying with Jake. She’s trying to ruin his relationship with Lady Rainicorn. Finn has tried telling Jake but hasn’t been able to because he sees how close he is to VUP. Jake might think Finn is jealous. Finn goes to Marceline and asks her what he should do. She says that it isn’t easy but he has to if he really loves his friend, even if it could hurt him. She told Finn that due to her powerful dad from the Nightosphere (The Lord of Evil) she is capable of sending VUP into the Nightosphere and to not be able to return. Finn and Marceline make a Pro Con list on Marceline’s white board (the white board has I<3LSP on it and a picture of LSP).

#6

We are making an episode of Adventure Time, therefore all of the characters are pre-established, but they undergo a new adventure to reach Finn’s ultimate goal of being a hero. The episode will begin with the main characters Finn and Jake walking through the woods in the land of Ooo. Finn questions aloud to Jake about what the meaning/purpose of their life is. Finn has a flashback to the first episode when his goals were written on his arm. Jake makes a startlingly deep comment about the meaning of life and then turns it into something stupid like only Jake can do. They hear a crash deeper in the woods and run to investigate the sounds of distress.

To begin their adventure Finn and Jake meet V.U.P (Vampire Unicorn Pegasus) a “dark horse” and foil for Lady Rainicorn. VUP had tripped over a rock while flying (she’s very clumsy and talks only in Spanish) and run into a tree, bruising her horn. Finn and Jake find her and bring her back to the tree house and nurse her back to health, afterwards the three go out into the land of Ooo to fulfill Finn’s bucket list making Lady Rainicorn jealous (Jakes girlfriend). Princess Bubblegum comforts Lady Rainicorn when Jake doesn’t go to their usual four o’clock jam session.

A montage of Finn, Jake, and VUP slaying goblin hordes and doing the other things on Finns bucket list. There is an awkward stop in the montage in which LSP (Lumpy Space Princess) interacts with them. Lady Rainicorn finds them off on adventures and gets angry with Jake and flies away. Jake is faced with an internal conflict of who to be with. He wants to be with his friends, but he already missed the four o’clock jam session. Finn eventually finds out that VUP is from the Nightosphere when he sees her come and go. He realizes she is pure evil, just toying with Jakes heart.

Finn is conflicted with how he should tell Jake. He tries to tell him multiple times, and he can’t. However when Finn realizes his friend is in danger he gets help from Marceline (who is also from the Nightosphere). He asks her what he should do, and she says they should send her back into the Nightosphere and she has the power to make her stay there, because her father is The Lord of Evil from the Nightosphere. They walk back to see Jake and VUP who are playing together.

Marceline sees VUP and falls in love. She instantly claims that she wants her. She runs and jumps onto her back and they gallivant into the abyss. Lady Rainicorn and Jake make up and the four of them have a jam session. The screen goes back to VUP and Marceline still riding off. Everything seems happy ending until VUP disappears into the Nightosphere leaving Marceline behind. It zooms in on her disappointed face and the episode is over. None of the characters particularly changed but life lessons were learned, as well as morals.

#5~Revision

The only human in the land of Ooo embarks on a dangerous journey to fullfull his bucketlist; will love be lost along the way with the introduction of a new mysterious friend.

Blog Entry #4 ~ Logline

Tyler Wilston and Jenny Macking :)
With a new friend on a journey to fulfill the only human’s bucket list in the land of Ooo, will his bestfriend lose his lover along the way?

Blog 3 ~ Knowing Five People With Six Words

Changed baby's diaper; changed mom's too.

I liked this one a lot. It gave the emotion of the hardships of having children. Not only that, but it also portrayed how you're a kid twice and an adult once. It was short and to the point but showed how this woman is taking on two roles.

He wrote love on my arm.

I liked this one a lot in particular. I felt the love that I have with my boyfriend Tyler. We “wrote love” on eachothers arms. We both went through depression and have hope and hope to give hope to other people that it will be ok.

My suicide note is 759 pages.

There was a hardship that just made my heart drop for this person. They’ve had to have a lot of deep hurt feelings in order to be able to write that much about wanting to die. There is a lot of build-up that people accumulate and it’s sad.

Write it... Crumple it.... swallow it....

This one made me think of someone who always wanted to say what they were feeling. However they always ended up totally getting rid of the idea and demolishing it. It was very powerful, and accentuated by the punctuation.

Grow up? Had too. Mom died.

Growing up is something that at times people are forced into. At any age events are presented which it is necessary to step up to the plate. To me it seemed like this person had to grow up after the tragic event of the loss of their mother.

Blog #2~ And the Ref calls GOALLLLL!

Psh improvement, no way my writing is perfect! Yeah no, no one's writing is perfect. Even our favorite published authors have editors to assist them. We all have room for improvement and should set goals to get to a better writing with baby steps. You just gotta take things "bird by bird" as said by Anne Lamott in her book Bird By Bird. In context she was just saying to take things one step at a time, to just WRITE. However “Just write” is not exactly good advice for people who do not like writing, so it is a good thing this is a writing blog. Two of my starting goals are variety and thoughtfulness. I love to write but doing new things is hard for me. My comfort level is at poems, short stories, lyrical pieces, and essays. However this needs to be expanded to scripts, novels, and etc. I actually am working on a novel. I have many ideas and thoughts floating around in my head so I put a bunch of them on paper. But it isn't as easy at it seems and I can't wrap my mind around which one I truly could run with. I think it's just time for me to sit down and write. Work on getting all of my thoughts together. I have really intense thoughts and I can't conceptualize it all onto the paper. Capturing voice and engaging the reader are something that I have to work on, and getting these thoughts into my head on paper is my goal.

Blog #1~ This is it Guys

My name is Jenny, my full name is irrelevant to you so frankly I'm not telling. I created this blog with my Creative Writing class and here is my first post. I will be posting about a variety of things and I hope you stick around with me, you're more than welcome to give me some feedback because who knows good writing better than my readers!? I have another blog on tumblr, but this one will be more focused upon my writing. Writing is ubiquitous, in fact I am doing it write now. To write in my mind is to be free. Many people turn to drugs or to alcohol, but not me folks I turn to my writing. Writing is one of my escapes. Other escapes are not limited to but include; horseback riding, swimming, hiking in Alaska, music, concerts, and man... could I go on! All of my escapes are portrayed in my writing, and no, not all at once. I love reading; science fiction, fantasy, nonfiction, fiction, romance (now that I'm not single I don't cry as much), adventure, mystery, historical fiction, and anything good I can get my hands on. I don't always have the time to read and write, but this year now that I have been accepted into all of my colleges WOOHOO! I am going to be doing a lot more of both. My writing strengths are poems and song lyrics, but I will try it all in this blog. So follow me if ya want too, and if not I wont know so no big deal.